As we wait patiently for more queries to come in (revisions on Evil Editor's blog get rerouted to here, or you may send your query directly to phoenixsullivan @ yahoo.com), I thought we could try our hands at writing one-sentence pitches.
Several agents have blogged about the importance of having multiple vehicles readily available to talk about your book -- everything from a logline to a paragraph to a full-blown query and synopsis. Of particular importance, if only for dazzling guests at cocktails parties, is the one-sentence logline or hook. I won't recount what others have said perfectly well and then some, so go read agent Rachelle Gardner's advice and critiques, which are fairly comprehensive, then come back here to put what you've learned into practice.
How to write the hook sentence
Examples of good ones and why they're good
Examples of less-good ones and how they can be improved
If you haven't experienced the true delight of condensing your 100,000-word story down to fewer than 30 words, then you probably still have a full head of hair and hope for the future. Agonizing over a query is nothing compared to trying to boil down the essence of your book to little more than the length of a tweet.
So post your results in the comments and feel free to comment on everyone else's.
Sorry, no contest or prizes like Rachelle offered. But my log line got an honorable mention, so I'll start us off by reposting it here:
When a cloning project reintroduces the pandemic that wiped out the Ice Age megabeasts, a veterinarian and a CDC investigator battle to keep humans from becoming the next target for extinction.Looking forward to seeing YOURS!